Wow, that's just aweful. poor guy; poor girl. i can relate to the sickness of not wanting to eat. anyway great write; what was your inspiration? 5/5 love.

Wow... This peom was a really really heartfelt and emotional read. It sent shivers down my spine. It was such a sad sad story behind your words. I feel sorry for both in the story. Anorexia is a deadly desiese. No one can deny that. ANyways i really liked the story behind this poem. The strucutree and flow put me off at times but overall quite na enjoyable and very sad read. Thank you for your comment! Keep writing. xx

Sad story, good poem. Its amazing what people do to themselfs, not like I am one to talk, Suicide should never be the answer though.

Oh. i am a bit like that. but i an't dead. i don't look in the mirror. but i eat nothing really.

well done. i loved it. was simply perfect.

5/5 David

Now this was a very sad read. I could feel for both people. Her, because anorexia is a deadly disease and horrible to live with [even though, I, myself have never experienced it]. And him, because it is truly awful to come home and find out horrible news such as that.

Very nicely penned.

Shed rather drowned than gain a pound.

A helpless body that couldn't take no more

He was heart broken when he heard the news.

Oh nnoo. THat was horrible. Oh my god, I'm crying. This really got to me like not many poems do. The flow wasn't perfect but it was good, the rhymes worked pretty well. The emtoion and descriptions you put into this was amazing. The feelings were shining through every word. Wow, this was really sad. I would have liked the boys reaction to be a bit more detailed, I felt the description lacked there a little. But overall, a fantastic poem. I am so glad I read it. 5/5

Shed rather drowned than gain a pound.
^ It should be "she'd" and "drown"

A helpless body that couldn't take no more
^ It should be "any" not "no"

Woops. Sorry, forgot to point out the mistakes.

What a surprise ending that was! I never guessed that was happening... Great twist to such a tragic tale! Although the poem is suspenseful and kept my full nail biting, on the edge of my sear, sort of attention...the flow of this poem lacked. When I'm having trouble making things flow, I give a copy of my poem to a friend and have them read it out loud to me as I take notes as to where the stumble, or seem to speed up to make the syllable count stay on beat. In those places it's usually where the flow is off and something needs to be changed.

Wow.
I loved it. :]
Maybe break the top into stanzas?
other than that amazing job! keep it up hun.

This is so sad and has a powerful meaning.