Hahaha. This is my all time favorite part:

Where we're hand in hand,
And...I F u c k i n g Love You.

I love your writings so far :) You did a great job on this.. the rhyming...wait there was none... oh well it went grrreat with out it. The flow.. magneficent!

5/5

I don't know if this is a nature poem. but you know. who cares. and your not really supposed to swear. but i still loved all the poem. gave it an extra zing to it!

5/5 David

Good but you sorta ruined the end there with the profanity. try to use a more professional word, there are soooo many other words you can use than that to express how great and true your love is for him. other than that, i like the matreial and i like the uniqueness of the poem wonderful job that way. 5/5

Nice poem, i like that you repeat i fly high and the ending, but im not sure if you may curse in poems but *who cares* ^_^ 5/5

Flying is a very symbolic type of poetry. good job

your servant:
david

This is a interesting poem. It's good. Great job. 5/5
-vino

Nice, is that really a nature poem though? I dunno, but great poem still :D

This poem is quite remarkable, whereas I see no purpose of the last stanza's content. Due to that, it blemished the delivery of the poem's message--being in a state of bliss of liberty, I suppose, as it shifts to expressing your love to someone. If its intended to be a nature poem, then I see no relevance of the concluding stanza. Other than that, I have taken a fancy to this work in regards to its technical areas. I love how it flowed as I read through as well as its message till the fifth stanza.
Nice work. Thanks for sharing.

Hey y'all.
i tried adding i onto the poem, but it never appeared.
well. what i wanted to say is.
first off the reason it's in nature is because flying to me is kinda nature-ish so ya.
also i kinda wanted to "trick" people. so it's kinda a surprise ending.
and as for the curse/cuss/profanity/swearing...whatever you want to call it. the reason it is in this poem is cuz when people say "ily" or "ifly"...I write it as "iFLY". it's kind of an inside joke, but one day i was just thinking... and this is how the poem came to be.
so i am truly sorry for the people who don't like swearing, i personally don't either...but in this case, it's all a point of MY view and something that i just thought of. and it came to be.
anyways i'm just yacking on and on.
thanks very much to all of youz though fro commenting, it really means a lot to me!

Aww this was so cute. There was detail and i liked how each stanza started off with 'I fly high' and it ended with that line. I also liked the naughty word that you used..expressed the feeling a lil more. Well done 5/5 Xx Chrissie

I really love how this poem describes an idealistic world, and then at the end you link your love with this perfect world, and this suggests to the reader that that is what takes you there. I think that's really clever. Great poem!

By the way I like the use of the swearing at the end. It pushes across the intensity of your love.

Hehe..that was BEAUTIFUL! including the little twist of bad language at the end :p naah..it was great..i didn't expect the end! i dont really know what others have to say about it..but i truly loved it!
nuf luv xx