Wow.. so much emotion, and the flow is awesome, all except for the last line in the 4th stanza, idk, maybe it's just me, but it doesn't seem to fit.. maybe if you reworded it?? The wording everywhere is else is exceptional, and the idea is awesome, I totally know how you feel. It's so difficult to not be seen by the one you love. Awesome write 5/5
Much Love,
.:Danielle:.

OMG. omgomgomgomg.

Idk what to say. Lol. I'm seriously bawling my eyes out right now! But, that's just cos.. I can relate so much & it's so beautiful. [and also, i'm so very emotional right now]. haha.

But I absolutley adored this. It had so much emotion in it. It flowed wonderfully & nothing seemed forced.

Perfectly penned, deary.

Bri [x]

And wait you will have to do. but remember that good things come to those who wait. this was a great poem.

5/5 david