I love that first part Ignoance is your choice. like blindly looking the other way i love it. I GLAD YOU GUYS ARE OK NOW, it makes reading this better
because i hate telling someone i enjoy thier poem and its about bad
stuff, but its so good yet i feel guily saying i enjoy readoing it. you know what i mean right/ cy

This is very well organized but i lacks a little in emotion... i think maybe you can try to focus a little less on your word choice in sense of rhymning and a little more on expressing emotion..... not all poetry has to rhymn.... sometimes that gives it even more emotion because people dont normally speak in rythmns when expressing their emotions to others now do they.... but i still think this is pretty good......4/5