Heartache (Cinquain)

by Sarah Ann   Mar 18, 2007


Heartache
Killing my hope
Breaking. Draining my soul
Like raisins drying in the sun,
It won.

(My first attempt. Don't hurt me)

The traditional cinquain is based on a syllable count.
line 1 - 2 syllables
line 2 - 4 syllables
line 3 - 6 syllables
line 4 - 8 syllables
line 5 - 2 syllables

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  • 17 years ago

    by Melissa

    Oh that last line was powerful! Very sad and heartbreaking, yet so eloquent. Nice cinquain!

  • 17 years ago

    by Laura

    Sarah i must say this was a fantastic first attempt...i haven't finished mine yet (which will also be my first attempt)...you make it appear easier than it is...with your unique talent!

  • 17 years ago

    by Liz

    I love this. Love the message portrayed in this. I used to write these EVERYDAY back in 8th grade...but now...I don't think I could write one to save my life. Lol. This was excellent for your first try. The part that said "Like raisins drying in the sun" reminded me of the poem "Like A Raisin In The Sun". Heh. Anywho...I really did like this one. 5/5.

    Love you.

    ` Liz

  • 17 years ago

    by OHgreenman

    For your first attempt.....well done!! ( I haven't done one of these either) Hope mine turns out as well as yours.

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