by Dee
Excellent! 5/5 very good imagery and use of words. i really really like this poem! |
I liked this poem a lot! Great word choice and flow. 4/5 xoxo |
by David
Oh this is such a sad poem. how you added you into this was emotional. well done but it did bring a tear to my eye. |
by xo kisses xo
Awe *tear* that is so sad. |
I liked this poem. it was sad, but still amazing. but then again the sad poems are usually the best ones. |
Omg. awe ;/ So so sad. This was so full of emotion. Tears were brought to my eyes ;[ For a true story [I believe] you did amazing.. it flowed so well & the rhymes were good. Nothing seemd at all too forced. |
by Liz
This was a heartbreaking piece. I love the detail and description you used...I can picture it all happening in my head. Just one thing...I think the ending could've been a little different in wording maybe...I dunno it seemed to just stop quickly. Idk I can't really explain what I'm tryina say but it doesn't really matter. This was an amazing write all in all. I loved it. Keep writing! 5/5 |
by UnToLd TrUtH
Aww this is really sad. It brought tears to my eays. Wonderfully written 5/5 |
That was definitely heartbreaking. The rhyming flowed really well and overall I really enjoyed the read. |
by azii
Nice poem. |
by firexdancer
This is too sad, i almost cried just reading it, it flows perfectly, and wow, it was beautiful, 5/5 you are an amazing writer |
by Tricky Daze
Wow so sad,is this really happened? |
by Teria
Okay, in the 10th stanza your comma should be after ' overwhelmed ' |
by Roxy
That is such a good poem..I loved the last stanzas the most they made you wonder what was about to happen next and you where determine to find out!! |
by David
Hey this poem is very sad. i wish i could be there with you to let you cry. i am always here if you need someone to talk to. k? |
by Carmen
Aww... thats so sad. but it seems threww the middle u repeated the story over again... why did he die? it was very sad and i like how u put it in the POV of a little girl very nice |
by Jessica
Oh my gosh, that is so sad. The flow was great and the rhymes worked. The descriptions were simple and gave it a uniqueness. I love it, keep it up hun. 5/5 |
by Mousie
Omg i can't even begin to imagine what you have gone through. what happened?? how did he die? that was what left you hanging at the end, like you have an idea that he's dead, but like you have no idea what happened. beautiful poem though, you kept my attention the entire time and wrote very nicely, good wording and flow. 5/5 |
by Bryce
Hey, Thanks for the comment on one of my poems. I love short poems, and i like to right them because it gets the reader to think about it more and question it, T.S. Eliot made a lot of short poems and they are amazing. Well thanks again |
by amoxi
Wow this poem was anmzing, it has ao much emotion and it was a nice touch to put it in a little s view, i loved it very nice job you're a great writer 5/5! |