Good job 5/5

This is definitely a style of poem that I don't generally read, so that was kind of cool. I like that you're dealing with a complex, multi-layered issue here. I think there are some places where you could change the wording, to transform "saying" into something more poetic. For example, "cried her eyes out." It's not like the line has to be beautiful, because sometimes poetry shows the darker side of life, but "crying one's eyes out" just isn't that pleasing of a phrase, you know? lol. finally, I like the fact that you suggest some sort of rhythm or repetition, because this guy has left her siblings before. if you played that up even more, i think that would be sweet.

on a side note - man, you have a lot of poems! kudos to you

She can get passed his wrongs
^ It should be "past"

Awh, that was so sad hunni. I hope its not true. The emotion in this was very strong and really shone out. The flow was good as were the heartfelt descriptions. Nicely done 5/5

That was a really heartfelt poem. So much emotion, and attention to detail in explaining the story. I'm terribly sorry if this happened to you. The story was told well and I like that it's structured differently to the poems I usually read. A great write. 5/5

Tammie