Thats brought tears to my eyes and shivers through my body xxxxxxxxxxx its so very well written and i relate to it alot, you have such a wonderful talent for writing and this poem is very very well written, keep in touch xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx

Terribly sad & fills me with horror when I think that you go through this. ( If this poem is true. ;] )
Overall, no complaints with this one. The emotions were amazing though. =]

"The drugs have started to take their toll on you,
You no longer have common sense.
You never express emotion,
You never get upset."

^ I can understand this more than anyone, with a certain special someone that is close to me.

Fantastic write hun, keep it up!
5/5

Stephanie Lynn .+.

Yes Stephanie, it's true...Just about all of the things I write about are...I've seen and been through alot...Thanks for your comments!!!

Wow, this is really good. the emotions are everywhere here. my parents divorced when i was 11 but i cant really relate to having those kinds of problems with my mom. but i can definatly see where this came from. well writtin too. (:

I know whats it's like to be alone for the most part, and it is difficult while your young and growing up. But when you have to fend for yourself at a young age, you become responsible and you grow as a person. I believe that I have a better outlook on life due to the things in my past. Great job on this one 5/5

Wow...I can relate to this poem as well.. Very much so. When I read your poetry, it really makes me think.. And your dark poetry, I just think of my past and such. Keep writing. =) 5/5
-Ally

The poem had it`s flaws, but it was deep . It held raw emotions and painful memories; telling the world just how awful this world can be . I liked it (:
..__MiNDYY

The poem started out strong until stanza seven and beyond.

"Bubba tried to kill himself,
But do you even care?
You still haven't called to check on him,
and you're not here to wipe our tears."

There's just something I do not like about this stanza, perhaps it just struck me as being overused.

"But if you would just stand up and be there,
Our problems would go away.
I could forget my past and move on with life,
I would finally be complete."

I was slightly disappointed with the way you ended it, but after I re-read it three times over, I figure it wasn't as bad as I first thought.

Your four-lines stanza gives the impression that it's a rhyming poem...perhaps that is why I often stumble over words, because I expected it to rhyme.

There were some stanzas that gave the impression that you will rhyme every over sentence, therefore also making me stumble over a few words.

Maybe you can alter it so that it does not confuse your readers, or just leave it as it is.

4/5

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(")-(") Arrivederci!

Wow this poem was so sad.. its heartbreaking when people place their children in situations like that, which can be easily avoided. I am soooo sorry that you had to go through that. Hopefully after that expereience you will learn from it and never put your children through the same thing. Nice write.

This poem had a lot of pain in it but i was confused o if bubba was ur brother or what but other than that it was very well written

Bad place to be in as a child, but well written and alot of emotions felt. great work.

This touched me deeply it was told like a story and it gave me shivers good job xxx alex xxx

Lovely work!!.soo tuching n it was filled with emotions n tht added power to your work....it was sort of story-ish write...but the way u've penned it n conveyed emotins is great!..kp up the good wrk!
xxPoojaxx

Well it was a good read. and I'm sorry if you had a bad childhood :( the flow was flawless keep it up well penned! keep up the good work!

This poem makes me want to cry and even though i cant honestly tell you that i have been through your situation but when i read this i feel like im there with you, getting in between the fight trying to stop it and i just feel helpless cuz i cant be there to help!

Awww this poems so sad! ive had a bad past when it comes to my parents but nothing as bad as this...hope you stay strong xx

I love this poem you did a amazing job on it i am still amazed about it..

Again, a very sorrow heartfelt poem. I love how you do not follow tradition and stick to a pattern.

It is refreshing to read this knowing that it came from the depths of your heart. I think you have done wonderful in finding a way to realse your pain; even if only for the moment.

--Sher

This poem was very sad, and you could see it had alot of pain behind it, but you did a great job at portraying the message behind this, 5/5