:O wow thats such an amzing poem. well done, i hope things get better for you, its very emotional and strong to read. its good keep writing please x x x x x x x

This will never change. = it will never be right (?)

I actually found very few errors on this poem, of which I am very pleased. The poem was touching, and even though small I did enjoy it.

I hope this is not a true story, and there isn't much to say about this poem.

Oh, this part:

*and say the tears so often.*

I'm not really sure about that. Is "say" supposed to be "saw"

Oh well.

Good write dear.

Onto your next.

5/5
~Stephen White

This is so deep. defiantly a great job you did with writing it. keep it up! 5/5

~Kristina

This poem was really good. I liked what you did with just a very vague subject like a house. I also liked how you left what really happened up to the imagination of the reader and didnt tell them everything, thats a tallent. Nice job, thanx for sharing it with us all.