A Snowflake in the Wind

by Daniel J   Mar 20, 2007


Down upon the Earth below,
A single snow-flake floats;
Flits about within the wind,
It for no-one stops.

Fashioned from the purest snow,
It falls to Earth from high above,
Patterned in it's perfect shape,
Doesn't have a single flaw.

For all the snowflake's perfect form,
But one has seen this snowflake fall,
And even so the detail's lost;
Have not the sight to see it more.

And all this flake knows how to do,
Is to be so very still;
Allow the winds to move it 'round,
To control where it should be.

The hapless flake's descent goes on,
And it can see the world,
But the ground looms ever near,
Be warned it's end is nigh.

As it's set upon the ground,
It's life just melts away;
It's been around for but an hour,
This tear from heaven's door.

Begin now what you will,
Shine forth as the brightest star,
Lest like this snowflake melt away,
'Way into the depths.
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This poem was inspired by the snowfall today.
In actuality, it is heavily metaphorical...What it means is just for me to know. But it is a love poem. As it doesn't look or sound like a love poem, I stuck it in the nature section.

There is, however, one hidden message which I shall share with you. It can be found by taking the first word of the last line in every stanza. The second message is the entire last stanza.

"It doesn't have to be this way:" you don't have to melt away. You can "shine forth as the brightest star."

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  • 17 years ago

    by Jaime

    Nobody chooses better words than you do, Daniel. Despite the fact that it was a metaphor, you described a beautiful scenery that could have made a great poem in itself.

    Really, that was a nice poem, and I love the fact that you can add hidden messages in there without throwing off the flow. Good job. :)

  • 17 years ago

    by Gem

    I understand how it could be a love poem but i may be interpreting it differently to how you meant, lol.
    I loved the hidden message, very nicely done.
    5/5
    *Gem*

    (I agree with you about the repetition and double lines but unfortunatly thats the way a paradelle goes, lol)

  • 17 years ago

    by Angie

    Well, I understood its meaning long before I read your notes at the bottom. It's a beautifully written poem, powerful as well. You're a nice addition to our club, welcome.

  • 17 years ago

    by chavii

    Beautiful poem ,enjoyed reading it. One can feel the deep meaning in the lines.