Beautiful poem ,enjoyed reading it. One can feel the deep meaning in the lines.

Well, I understood its meaning long before I read your notes at the bottom. It's a beautifully written poem, powerful as well. You're a nice addition to our club, welcome.

I understand how it could be a love poem but i may be interpreting it differently to how you meant, lol.
I loved the hidden message, very nicely done.
5/5
*Gem*

(I agree with you about the repetition and double lines but unfortunatly thats the way a paradelle goes, lol)

Nobody chooses better words than you do, Daniel. Despite the fact that it was a metaphor, you described a beautiful scenery that could have made a great poem in itself.

Really, that was a nice poem, and I love the fact that you can add hidden messages in there without throwing off the flow. Good job. :)