by I Seem to be the Heartless Mar 20, 2007
category :
Dark, fantasy /
dark, horror
The words tattooed on my soul, |
I love the imagery and the vocabulary in this poem, especially the first 5 lines. I liked how you compared your heart to a child, and I also liked how you changed the length of the stanzas each time. The only error I caught was the second stanza, second line. "Doesn't my hurt" didn't make sense to me, maybe I'm just not reading it properly though. Great job! |