I'll admit it didn't make me laugh but the rhythem was cute and more of a sing song tone. The first line was something that stood out--different and something that belonged in a funny poem. It made sense and kept the patteren going for a well written poem.

Definatly like how this is worded! the structure is really unique and Im greatly enjoying it!! 5/5! =)

I really liked this, such an interesting form. I liked the flow and mood of it. Very light hearted.It wasn't dark and depressing, and i like that:) great job! keep it up!

Lol. All i can say is funny poem with an unbroken flow. Wow. I don't really know what to say. I haven't read a funny poem in... years...

5/5
lol
~Stephen White

I'm surprised that it has such a low rating. I thought it was amusing. Maybe not outrageously funny but i liked it. 5/5.

This poem was so interesting i loved it! It seemed like it could be made into a song lol really nice. The anger that flowed from it waas just amazing i loved the emotions you portrayed throughout this they made it seem so well written which is truely is. Well done ~mel