Great theme, very nice topic. The short lines and stanzas make it choppy.

{4/5}

[PygmyPuff]

You have tallent this poem reads like a short romantic novel

I love it. Not as much as I love you know who... But still its great! 5/5

Well... In fact, my opinion is, that the beginning was kind of weird.. But when I continued reading, It just got better... So Otherwise it was great.

My fav part:

I drown myself
in my thoughts,
Picturing me in his arms.

^^That's what I always do... *sighs*
Lol .. Anyway..

..Well done! 4/5

Keep up the good work

I like the way it has dialogue, not really done too much in poetry
good poem!

This is a good poem
yes we are all in denial at one point
but you need to get it out there that you like him
because you never know he might like you aswel
and if you dont you may miss your chance
and then later on find our he liked you aswel
xox

I like this poem alot.
You did a good job.
keep writing!!
5/5
take care!

~Chelsea

I really liked the style of this poem, its start out seemingly innocent and sweet but really has a darker and more heartfelt message. Excellent job!

Aww I love this poem! I can definitly relate to it heck! what girl cant? I loved how it was short yet really cute and amazing!! You took this poem to a higher level! nice job!

I really didn't like the dialoge in this poem. It seemed really immature. The rest of the poem was awesome though. I really like where it picked up. But as an introduction, I would take it out. Good stuff though.

That was beautiful. the dialog was good. it was perfect. change nothing. 5/5