When did the value of one life
Become more important then another?

those lines as well as the last stanza were amazing! this was a good poem. It could use some work with the flow but it was a good poem with some strong points. Nice to see somebody who wants the world to be a better place!
Charisma*

I liked this poem however certain parts weakened it I felt, such as 'War and strife wonâ??t fail to persist.' I think would sound better pherhaps as desist. And a couple of other lines I felt were slightly long. Overall though a beautiful positive message, true sentiments and a good wake up call.

Well, it certainly is good to read you again my friend. Hope all is well with you. This write is quite powerful and brings forth a message that the world needs to hear. Very inspirational indeed. Welcome back my sweet and hope to read more of you soon. Do drop me an email when you get the time.

Smiles, Hugs and Love, Angela

Very inspirational Bert...a wonderful & heartfelt write as always.....wonderful job....
hugs, Ann

This is so true! the meaning and moral of the poem is so clear and inspiring and this gives it such depth. a great write! thankyou xXx

First of all I wanna thank you for writing this piece.

Fsams analysis of your poem:

Heading:

The headind World of Piece is 100% cohesive and relavent to the content of this piece. The aspects outlined in the poem reflects back to your caption. Great!

Poetic qualities:

The flow and the rhythm is nice in this piece. The poem is written in stanzas so I think it would be better if you split the line "Even with us as the protesters own foolish actions are the authorities maze." in to two.

Content:

Your poem covers a wide range of aspects reflecting the caption and outlining how piece and harmony can be restored to make the world a pieceful place.

Remarks:

The poem is well structured and of great poetic quality.

Rating: No doubt I should give you 5/5

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