Comments : The ultimate sin

  • 17 years ago

    by BrixGoesxRawr

    Wow, hun. That was great. It flowed very well & nothing seemed forced. It had a lot of emotion in it, as well.

    Replaying conversations
    That were best left unsaid
    Discovering illicit relations
    Happening in her own bed

    ^ This was my favorite stanza. Absolutely amazing, darlin'.

    Bri [x]

  • 17 years ago

    by Jenni Marie

    Beeeeeautiful.
    Powerful words, perfect imagery, flawless flow.
    The first stanza hadme hooked, the rest just kept getting better and the last stanza was such a perfect ending.
    As I said before, beeeeautiful!