The Luckiest Guy (part 5)

by Goran Rahim   Mar 22, 2007


Dear the luckiest guy in this world,
Sorry for writing a note again.
But I have to write you this
Taking out the heart's pain.

Remember my first note,
What did I told you at the start?
I begged you to make her happy,
Why did you break that princess's heart?

In your love she forgot everything,
Even my purest love.
How come now you are the one
Making her life so tough.

Why have you done that to her?
Don't you have a heart too?
How could you give her fake hopes?
By the drama of "I love you"

I asked you to respect her,
I begged you to give her joy.
Why did you break her naive heart?
That heart was not your toy.

The love for you blinded her,
Yet you are not appreciating her.
If you made her forget my name,
Then why did you leave her?

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  • 16 years ago

    by Phantasmagoria

    I really enjoyed the repitition, and most of the subject of the poem, but I feel like there's something missing....you got most of it down though, the way the first stanza and the last interact and capture the reader's attention the best. =]

  • 16 years ago

    by NicoleBaby101

    I so give it a 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Bhavin

    Hi Goran,

    I think I had 2 write this one. Frankly speaking I became a fan of yours when you wrote The Luckiest Guy part 1. But slowly slowly it just started to fade. Not because the rest were bad, but they could create on impact on my heart. And then you wrote part 4 and 5. I must tell you that you proved me wrong. You aint a 'one poem wonder'. Thanks for proving me wrong. Because it may feel good 2 be defeated by better ones but I feel gr8 to be defeated by my friend....

    Take care. And keep writing.

  • 16 years ago

    by XxToWriteLoveOnHerWristxX

    Amazing just like the other four. are you going to make a sixth?

  • 17 years ago

    by Jess

    I love...LOVE these poems.... I read all of them and all of them are so great... Keep up the good work. 5/5

    xoxoxo
    Jess

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