After You Said Yes

by Kurt   Mar 22, 2007


"You caught me off guard"
You say with tears in your eyes
"I cannot go with you"
You mumble as you cry

My heart slowly shatters
And I say that "I'm fine"
Everything is spinning
I'm walking a thin line

On one side lays death
The other breathes life
I'm shrouded in pain
And dragged down by strife

I know that this hurts
You just as bad as me
Yet I will stay behind
As you fly away free

You say you're sorry
But I must confess
It will never be enough
After you said yes

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  • 17 years ago

    by Ambar

    Great poem, know the feeling- can totally relate 5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by ImNotPerfect20

    Great poem i really liked it.. It had good flow and rhymed really well. its also very easy to relate to.. it had one mistake that i seen and it was not that big of a deal either.
    "I know that this hurts
    You just as bad as me"
    where it says "you" its supposed to be "Your" i think it is anyway.. lol 5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by Teria

    Memories, oh memories. Loll.
    It brought back many.
    Anyway.

    This was a great poem, easily related to.
    Great emotion, perfect flow.
    I loved it, once again: Great, great, great poem!

    Keep it up, sweetheart.
    <3

  • 17 years ago

    by Karl Wild GG23

    I love the poem and the meaning behind it, we're all forced to make choices in life and sometimes it's hard. I think if you used some punctuation in key points in your poems that they would appear much better. Just write your words as you would say them, if your gunna have a little pause in between words then toss a comma in. The poem was still great and very few things need to be changed. excellent job 5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by Brook

    This is really good. I really liked this. The rhyming was good, and its sweet yet sad.
    good job
    <3