Tears of Lost Trust

by Xx Eternal Fantasy xX   Mar 22, 2007


Sitting in class, I'm looking down
Thoughts going through my head making me frown
Down my cheeks, my tears start to crawl
Trying to stop, put my fears aside and take control

But its so hard, the thoughts are being hurled at me
I feel a sudden chill, wishing that in my room I can be
With no one around to see me cry
No one around to see my wrist so bloody

I can see classmates looking at me
I feel hugs and kisses layed on me
By people everyone calls my friends
I can't say they are, because it all ends

I see them looking at me, feeling that they are fake
I feel that I'm always being used, and real friends were something I couldn't make
I feel like everyone intends to pretend
they mean nothing, they always hurting me, they ain't real friends

I feel so afraid of every one around
Avoiding words, trying not to get hurt and fall to the ground
At home its not better, no one understands me
I'm always being put down, I know I'm never going to be free

Everyday, my tears want to crawl
When I'm emotionally hurt, I feel the need to let my blood fall
I have no one to call
No one I call a real friend, my tears and blade, that is all

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  • 17 years ago

    by Vanessa

    I loved this one it is one of the best ones of your I have read so far. You did an excellent job 5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by The Lonely Rose

    Wow..i think tht this would b better in sad but it does well in here too so its sort of in the middle..i can relate to this in a sense....especially the friends part...this poem is really good u hav talent...

  • 17 years ago

    by ASPHYXIATED

    Helloooooooooo.
    This poem had alot of deep emotions in it, which was good.
    "I see them looking at me, feeling that they are fake
    I feel that I'm always being used, and real friends were something I couldn't make
    I feel like everyone intends to pretend
    they mean nothing, they always hurting me, they ain't real friends"

    That verse didn't flow as steady as the others. My opinion would be too shorting it in bits. But twas still good.

    I think we could all relate to your poem at some point in our lifes so that made it good alsoooo.

    The rhyme scheme wasn't constant which made it a bit akward to read.
    Some places rhymes & some didnt.
    I'd say stick to ryhming or no rhyme.

    Good work =)

  • 17 years ago

    by dollwithafrown

    I think this was okay, but it wasn't fantastic. It's a very over-done theme, and some of the rhymes seemed a little bit forced.

    If this poem is true, them I'm sorry. And I hope things are better for you soon. I am liking how you manage to easily convey your feelings through a poem.

    As always, a pleasure to read.

  • 17 years ago

    by Carmen

    I really liked this one. i understand how this feels. it was a little shaky on the flow, but the desriptions u portrayed allowed u to pull it off. goodjob 5/5

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