Lol, the title reminded me of the movie, Vanilla Sky. Anyways, this was a really good first attempt. I know it's hard writing formed poetry, because you feel restricted, but you did a good job on this one. You also picked the best lines to be repeated. I still sort of don't understand Terzanelle, but one day I will learn!

This is a greta poem with beautiful vocabulary. It's not my favorite that you've done, but it's still gorgeous.

I absolutely adore this...
The first stanza had me completely hooked and from there it just kept getting better and better.
The wording was a pleasure to read, imagery beautifully done and it flowed well throughout.
Well done!