I'M AFRAID OF BEING ALONE AND MY VALUABLE HEART CRIES

Good write, this poem is sad and emotional but that what makes it good. I like that you state because you have given him you heart you lack a soul good connection.

"My heart(')s tears are knives"

"so my valuable [heart] cries"

"no [one] understands"

cause no one else [can] fill that hole"

"my heart has a [hole]"

"he took my but [didn't] love it" -- my...what?

In all truth, this wasn't as good and compelling, judged against the others that I've read from you; plus, words were redundant and grammatically incorrect on certain lines... My apologies, but I'm afraid I can't compliment this piece.

A rather good poem. I like your other two poems better. But i'm not saying that it's not good because it's a great poem. Keep it up.

An excellent write.
I don't normally read Slang poetry.
But I found your's enjoyable.

Well done,
Elaine.

I thought this was really good. very well written.. Good Job. and keep up the work.. although the only thing I can think of is maybe you can separate your lines into verses. That would make it flow better.. and not have it all in caps.. that kinda distracts the reader away from the words.. other then that its perfect. i give it a 5/5