Time Will Cure.

That's a very strong message. I love the choice of words and very nice ending. Makes me think about what I do everyday.. is it really worth it since nobody makes it out alive anyways?.. 5/5!! Great Job (:

Simply amazing! I can relate to every single line in this poem! The flow is great and there is not a thing that I would change! This one is going on my list of "favourite poems"! GReat job!

Wow. this is really great because basically its all true.
It shows alot of emotion and depth in your words. a really great flow and wording throughout the poem.

Well done. Keep it up!
*Hunny*

Ah, sorry about all the funny letters/symbols!

Brilliant, from beginning to line 12 (I'll get to the end later). An expressive and very definitive piece, I must say, I am pleased to have randomly clicked on your profile after seeing your post in the discussion board! That aside, your style of writing and delivery was superb; not only did you immaculately maintain your sense of rhythm; you knew exactly how to develop your ideas. And though some would label your language 'simple', I think this is precisely what anchors your piece. You make sharp and precise ‘poetic statements’ (if you like) that seem to roll off your tongue with no problem, and this is a exceptional quality in a writer, so very well done. Quite honestly, I have never been a massive fan of the term ‘babe’. It puts me off a little, lol. However, reading it in the very conversationalist tone you have, it seems to work; so well done for managing to keep my attention :)

My only two concerns lie in the following.
a) “time just doesn't last,” –this was perhaps the only point where rhythm was a little ‘off’. Because the rest of your lines seem to possess a sense of ‘full rhyme’, this one begs to differ slightly. What I would suggest is perhaps extending the line simply to ‘time just doesn’t seem to last’. This is an alternative suggesting, so you may or may not wish to comply!
b) “Hearts break baby and tears they tend to drop,
But over time those tears dry up and hearts will always stop.” –these lines are good, but that’s all they were. I didn’t quite feel the same spark as I did with the other ones. Not that they seemed forced, they just didn’t seem to possess the same honesty and realism as the rest of your poem does. I don’t have an alternative suggestion for you right now, but for now, in my humble opinion, I think line 12 would even be a great place to end.

Other than this, a marvellous read and I look forward to reading some more of your material. Well done :)