by ivkr81 Mar 24, 2007
category :
Life, society /
other
Too much focus on the what, the go-here go-there get where? |
by Cherise
I LOVED THIS! i love poems like this, i wrote a few of them myself. They tell the truth, that what i say, and your was no excpetion, great job! 5/5 |
by .K.i.T.t.Y.
The point is clear in this poem. however, after the second line it doesnt flow quite as well to the third. maybe you could divide this poem into stanzas? |