Comments : Teams With Dreams

  • 17 years ago

    by Cindy

    You ask alot of important questions in this piece.
    Good job!
    Take Care Cindy

  • 17 years ago

    by Twobit

    You are amazing, bro! Never seen anything like this! 5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by Fsams

    Nice poem reflesting the features of a team and how team spirit works. "What happens they fall?" this question can be better if it is "What happens as/when they fall?
    keep up the good work

  • 17 years ago

    by Jenni Marie

    "What happens when they fall?
    They rise better than before."

    ^^My favourite part of the whole piece.

    I loved how you started each couplet with a question and finished with the answer, I thought that had a very powerful effect on the overall piece...beautifully and elegantly written.