I loved this poem.
Very well written.
5/5

~Chelsea

Over all this was a wonderful poem... you put great emotion into this... your rhyming never seemed forced and the only thing I found that was your flow was off here let me show you:

Usually you want about the same sllylables in each stanza like 5 6 6 7 some where around the same number, you did that one some, but on the others you were a little off.

I hate this pain. 4 sllylables
This loneliness. 4
You put me here. 4
Now I must confess. 5

I've loved you forever. 6
Now you love her. 4
What am I suppose to do? 7
This pains to much to endure. 7

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for this one why not put:

I've loved you forever. 6
And now you love her. 6
All this pain you've caused 5
Is too much to endure. 6

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You said you loved me, 5
but I was to young. 5 --right here a typo you should have put too*--
Screw you now, 3
it's over I'm done. 5

But I still love you. 5
And I don't want to any more. 8
I want to be ridden of this pain. 9
This love thing is a bore. 6
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why not put:

Shockingly, I still love you. 7
But I don't want to anymore. 8
I want to be ridden of this pain. 9
This 'love' thing is a bore. 6
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You never loved me anyways. 8
To busy loving her. 6
I was just some child, 6
and I'm left here feeling burned. 7

I'll never forget you though, 7
or the memories we had. 7
I'm still here waiting for you, 7
and I'm left here feeling sad. 7
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over all babe it was wonderful. You don't have to take any of my advice.. that's your choice. Some people don't like it when I tell them what to do... but always in the bulletin they ask: 'Please help me with my poems! Show me what's wrong' then they get mad at me... Oh well I hope your not one of those people. Over all babe wonderful job! I enjoyed reading it.

5/5

This was so sweet and sad, i hope your allright, it was such a beautiful poem, it flowed perfectly and the emotion was so strong 5/5
luv gabriella

I really liked it. It makes me think about some things in life..your a great writer cant wait to see some new ones.

Ah but what is love but one of life's little problems and at the same time one of life's important feelings

your servant:
david

Wow..this is a very good poem..liked it alot and i cant relate to it so it sort of made me like it more keep on writing =)

Ah. this feeling, any reader can seem to understand and connect with. this was beautiful and hurtful. great job. 5/5.

Aww... another sad one... the flow was good.. uhm.. in this stanza

"But I still love you.
And I don't want to any more.
I want to be ridden of this pain.
This love thing is a bore."

the last line "this love thing is bore" seems like you only used the word "bore" because it rhymes with more

also, i LOVE this line "left here feeling burned."

I really like this one... it might be one of my favorites. i can tell you had so many emotions in you when you wrote this. the flow was good and i liked the rhyming. im so sorry you had to go through this though, i've been through this and it's torture... i still am going through it, and i guess it's nice to know im not the only one...
great job!
5/5!

I love how you move from one emotion to the next without losing the flow of the poem. It hit me hard...I'm 22 now, but I was involved in a "relationship" when I was 13 or 14 with someone quite a bit older...I thought it was true love, and was just getting used. harsh realization, great poem!!

Nicely penned. Full of emotion and the rhyming was done well, didn't seem forced at all which is a good thing. Great Job.

Peace, Joe

Wow.
Wonderful poem. It was beautiful, yet sad at the same time. I'm sure there are many who can relate. The flow was flawless, the word usage was great, and the emotions were strong. Fantastic job hun, keep writing! 5/5

Stephanie Lynn .+.

Wow, great one. I loved it:) 5/5

I liked this poem as well. I don't think it's one of your best ( that I've read ) but, it was good.

I think you should use a bit more punctuation through-out the poem. More commas, actually. There were a few places that needed them in order for the flow to be perfect; it was a bit off.
But, you did a great job, great emotions and meaning.

Keep it up.
4/5

This is a heartwrenchin poem...i can relate except it was with my old girlfriend...everythings changed now...but still...wonderful poem loved it 5/5

Awesome once again. Great flow, nice word choice, deep emtions great read 4/5

The flow on this was very good the message was real straight forward, but I see the folly of being young through out this poem which is not wrong it's just the old saying been there done that. Good write none the less keep it up Plot121