This is a good poem, you have a good talent here so keep writing. take kare xxxxx

I loved the first line the most. but i added, plz help me to it. so it was plz help me, im on my knees

well done. i loved this. sad yet very well done.

5/5 David

I can relate to this soo much tht it almost made me cry...yea...i dont think i can put a smily face cuz this relates to me and this is how i feel...u just made a perfect poem well in my eyes. from my point of view...awsomers! 5/5

Good poem. I think it would have read better if it was actually structured, but I still liked it. A strong feeling of sadness and desperation was conveyed.

Some words of advice: always remember to capitalise when you're writing 'I'. And don't forget apostrophes when needed!

Nice job.

Another well written poem, private message me if you ever need someone to talk to hun!