Wow. Powerful stuff, Danielle. I definitely don't consider this bad writing :)

he took what cant be given back
my everything i lack
words cant explain
the feeling i feel of pain
i want to be forgiven
i want my life to keep on living
because what I've done is not me
it's not what i want to be
whit I've done is in my past
what I've done can not last

That's a strong section. Is it about the loss of virginity by any chance?

Yeah it is... it is about me and my past.. thanks i really appricate you likeing my work... my ex was not a good guy at all. alot of my writeing is about my past with him... i hope you read more of my work and feel the same way... id love to hear from you agian