Thts gr8. the flow of words was also good. good use of belonging words. and the feelinings behind this.. you have talent. i loved your poem take care friend. 5/5

Reminds me of all O lack.
^ What is "O lack"?

I say I'm ok,bit I lied.
^ It should be "but"

This was good and contained a lot of emotion. I think the flow can be improved though. It is a bit edgy because of your rhyme scheme. Try and make the rhymes more smooth if you can. Other than that, the descriptions were pretty good and you used nice vocabulary. Nice job 5/5

My life's coming to a grisly end..
my silver knife,my only friend..
then everything around me comes to a halt
come look at my wrist..its all your fault

Those 4 lines were the perfect way to end the poem, very powerful. Wondefully written and great imagery too.
5/5

I think the last 4 lines were the best they definitly portrayed deep emotion. 5/5 from me ~mel

I love this poem..
its really good, coz its awsoem...
like i can feel that weird bad feeling in the back of my head when i was cloase to the end..
its awsome.

Srsly touching ... awesome.. peom.. i feel the same way at times.. very relatable.. srsly gr8 wrk.. especially the ending was just gr8...