TheUNSEENChild,
Postive comments:
* I like the fact you don't need to rhyme, the way it simply addresses the problem on the page. It lays it out with no fear of who might read or hear it.
* I enjoyed and consumed the way it was very truthful.
* I love you, you're a great poet. :)
Negative comments:
* Possibly the three lines could be made so the poem formed the same pattern.

Really good work darling, Love you always.
IxI 0pium IxI