Comments : From The Heart

  • 17 years ago

    by FlowerThatDied

    Sam,
    Positive Comments:
    * I think it's well written the way ou seperated the rhyming scheme.
    * I enjoyed the use of emotion as we have talked about this and you do well in expressing how you feel in a way that still makes you seem like it is all not true, that you are truly the happiest man on earth.
    * I love you.
    Negative comments:

    * Grammar: WERE (we're - we are?) all small dots
    ITS (It's or It is) you the sun glows for
    And ITS (It's or It is)
    Be careful for that sweet.

    Well-written, Love you lots
    Kisses
    IxI 0pium IxI