The chair
by philip Mar 29, 2007
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As i lean back i feel used and abused but yet i feel released from life but as you stand there and watch i see that you are nothing but an old woman and i have stayed young but as i wonder why i see that you have something in your hands and as i try to say no you plung the knife into your chest and i feel as if someone has destroyed a part of me and as i stare into your eyes i see the pain and sorrow drift away as you lose your life and i lose mine and as we die together i say 'i love you' |
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17 years ago
I liked the idea of the poem, but maybe you could try choosing a poetry form to write in, instead of the huge paragraph. Punctuation helps make it easier to read to and that can help with what people think of the flow when they read it. Overall good first poem.
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17 years ago
by Tricky Daze
The feelings are really got you feel and i liked it,but it's just advice that it would be better to read if you make it as shorter lines,i hope you understand what i mean,welcome to poerty Philip
Good job
Laura
