It was nice to read and i hope everything gets sorted out soon. Well done on expressing how you feel

Jochsey

Nicely done!
I loved those questions in the beginning.
Very good poem
Keep up the great work

Take care

Ive read some of ur poems...and i must say...wen u dont restrict urself to a rhyming poem...
i agree...i really likes the questions in the begining too...and thanks for ur wonderful criticism...definately my favourite critique :)

Pretty straightforward poem. Good job, you could consider adding more imagery. Great job

Over all your work, I read I saw alot of feel sorry for me format, I understand the hurt you may feel but by dwelling on it constantly is not only a bore for someone to read over and over but it limits your talents all around. I think you need a dictionary as well as some quality time with a book, by reading you get a better understanding of how to describe life as a whole and your vocabulary grows bringing you to a fuller spectrum of how to describe what you feel to your reader. Not saying your bad, but you have limited yourself and in this line of
communication your prospects are limited as well Just a thought Plot121

I do agree with what Robert above has said. He is a very talented writer himself. I do think that your grammar and punctuation skills need some help, i know you write to express emotions but i have been getting bored of reading near enough the same content in your poems.
Try and remember capital letters, it just makes the poem stand out more.
But a good job, none the less.
love Tara-Kay
x

I LOVE IT!!!! 5/5

It may not be your best, but it is a healing piece. The rawness speaks volume and the pain is tugging at the reader.

--Sher