Wow...that's dark. I can just imagine the skin splitting-*Sar K*

Stunningly deep, meaning goes far 5/5 keep up the intense poems

Oh!Emm!Gee! I could NEVER write like you do. You write with such words and you capture the reader into a time frame, however brief, and they go away with a residual (sp?) effect of the poem still lingering in their mind. You use such vivid and fantastic words and the flow and rhymes are always amazing! I don't read a lot of work that meets the standards that you have ((effortlessly, might I add)) set. I love it! As always, 5/5 and GREAT JOB!!

Toodles Darling!
Ciao

OMG! thats awesome!...ive done a parquette before it was crap...you seemed to pull this one of extremely well...

I dont know why but this line struck a chord with me

Broken wings trapped in jagged rusty chains

5/5