This poem has amazing rhythm and every single thought fits together so fluidly. I really enjoyed this. The rhyme is flawless, and really adds to the poem. I think lines 9-16 are my favorite. Great job.

Oh wow. I love this one. The vocabulary is really great, and the flow is wonderful. It rolls off the tongue well. Nice job. :]

P.S. I don't have a tune to it. I've never even written lyrics before, so I'm not that good at it yet. It needs some work. But thanks for the comment.

Hi love your writing ,Excellent poem
the presence of the
black abyss
that hides itself
in you.
well thought and well written , great job, 5/5

Hey, hows it going? I really loved this poem, it had depth and emotion which made me really enjoy it! Well penned, keep the great writting up! 5/5

Chan
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Hi I was drawn in by your beautiful picture, hope that doesn't freak you out. Makes a change from seeing who's got the weirdess threads on the discussion board..... then check out their poems lol., I love the ending
"you fear the thing that, most of all,
you proudly thought you knew:
the presence of the black abyss
that hides itself in you."

Two years ago I stood on that cliff face and made a dicission to carry on, maybe the black abyss is just too scary after all.

People take what they want from others poems for me I your poem had extra meaning than most

Elisha