Death has left its sneering mark
^ I think it would be better if "mark" was changed to "remark"

This was another vrey good poem. The descriptions and vocabulary were done excellently. The flow worked pretty well and the emotion in it was good too. Some of the rhymes did not match very well though and this threw me off a little. Still very well done though 5/5

I must admit i liked ur first one better cause in this one you didnt stick with the rhyme scheme...and it threw me off...but otherwise...i still thought it was extremely wellk done and for sure 5/5 material:):)

You certainly have a way with ending your poems.
I love this poem, it's so powerful and the first few lines had me hooked, and from then it just kept getting better and better.
Another great write.

Hmm interesting..i think u should make it longer put details on here...i think it would b better but thts just me..keep on writing =)

This is an amazing poem. I really, really like it. The way you describe the differences between the life and death of it all. Because you didn't actually say what you were talking about made more affect too, I think. Again, you use great vocab and your flow is great. Well done. =] 5/5

Tammie

Brilliant write. You have a talent that is genius and you utilize you ablities in this poem.

5/5

Omg it was amazing, it was really well writien
..*beautiful*..

---tara