Some thoughts about you.

by Hidden Feelings within these Words   Mar 30, 2007


To start off, I could go on for days telling you just how I feel.
But all you must really know, is that these feelings for you are real.

Your eyes so gentle, your smile so true,
When you first held my hand, I just knew.

You're an amazing person, and without you I don't know where I'd be.
Having you in my life completes and fulfills every part of me.

In your eyes, I see our present, our future and our past.
By the way you look at me, I know we will last.

My eyes light up, when I see you. I smile when we are together.
No matter how bad things are, you just seem to make them better.

I think of you each morning, and dream of you each night.
I think of your arms being around me, I can't even express my delight.

If time could stand still, I'd freeze it right here.
So, you would always hold me, so close and near.

I'm truly at peace when within your arms.
And I'm honestly captivated by your charm.

And as I stand next to you, by your side.
My true feelings for you, I cannot hide.

I ask myself, "Why do I love him?" I think and smile.
Because I know that the list could go on running for miles.

One day soon, I do hope you will come to realize.
Just how perfect you are..When seen through my eyes.

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  • 16 years ago

    by silent turbulence

    Its amazing... a lot like the way i feel... :)

  • 17 years ago

    by Melpomene

    I agree with Afraid of the dark on this one. I enjoyed this poem but i think that should need to try and take out the filler words as they stop the flow of the poem. Other then that and the syllable count. This is nicely written good effort

  • 17 years ago

    by tyanna

    I really liked this poem and don't feel that the two line stanza hurt it any.. It was very well written in my opinion and I enjoy your writting!! 5/5!!!!!
    ~Tyanna~

  • 17 years ago

    by Darien

    I really liked this poem, it was very touching.

  • 17 years ago

    by Kurt

    Okay, first off I believe that you need to even the syllable count. With the rhythm off the flow and rhyme scheme will never be good enough to keep the reader's attention. Also, i've noticed that few great poems are written with two line stanzas. Avoid filler words "because" "and" etc. These don't enhance the poem and just add syllables that can mess up your rhythm. I don't think this was badly written. I believe it is about average or slightly above. I'd rate it a 3.7/5. 'Course you get a four because i round up

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