Comments : I'm going to

  • 17 years ago

    by SiLeNtLy ScReAmInG

    Very good. I like the consistancy of using the title in the piece. The rhymes were slightly forced, but I liked the way you used them to move the poem onword rather than just rhyming to rhyme. My favorite stanza was:

    I'm going to cry
    until my eyes wont anymore
    I'm going to scream
    until my throat gets sore

    I liked your poem. Good Job 5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by Miss Megan

    At first when I started to read this, like the first comment, the ryhmes seemed very forced. But, somehow you made it work. I can relate to the feeling you described, and I love how you were very blunt. If you may take my advice; stay strong, you'll make it.
    Great work.
    5/5
    :D