Words can not describe how much I love this..
The imagery you used created very vivid pictures, the flow was flawless.
The first stanza was such a great opener and from then it just kept getting better and better.
Word choice was beautiful, and I was hooked by the first few lines.
Absolutely brilliant writing.

Wow.. not my favorite style of poetry but still an enjoyable poem..p a flawless flow and perfect rhymes.. wopnderful descriptions and spectacular word choice... grreeatt job! :D

Very vivid images. You are at a high level...I would like to read some of your future free-style poems to see how that goes unless you've already written some. I think free-style poems demand more from writers.

Its hard to find poems on this site with so much meaning...I admire your talent. 5/5

An interesting chilly write. Your discriptiveness and imagry made this poem come to life. I got lost in your wonderfuly selected words. The flow was thrown off just a bit in a few places.

"pulled from out of satin's grasp"
^^ this line could be read much more easily by making t "pulled out from satin's grasp" It saves the flow for that stanza

"No water running yet the bathtub over fills in bloody lakes"
Although I like the imagry of this it threw your flow off. The whole way through the poem you finished each compleate thought on every line. In this one you used two lines to compleate one thought. It sort of threw the flow off

Figures hidden by the shadows,
Drag themselves across the floor.
Hearing knocking from a distance,
Yet there's no one at the door.
^^^This was one of those paragraphs that make you dazed and kinda just go "wow" I loved it. Your an AMAZING writter, and this poem shows excellent talent!

I am so glad your equested that I read this. It was amazing. Chilling and scary as a matter of fact. I loved the word chioces, they breathed all the life into this one. The vocab was great, and the flow was flawless, and it was really an enjoyable read. 5/5, and I am adding you to my favorites.

Very sadly written and deep feelings i liked your way of writing

Cackles fill the hallway,
Laughter coming from [[the]] walls.
The flow would be better without it.

It talks to me in its new role.
Something doesn't seem right about that line.

Yet [[there's]] no one at the door.
It'd sound better if you say
There is.

[[You're]] life's never the same again,
It's your.

Just like a bussiness letter,
It just looks and sounds better
Without contractions.
I don't know... maybe it's just me.

All in all.
It's better than the last I've read.
So 5/5

This poem reminds me of one of mine... i really like it . it was dark but it drew this picture in my mind like everything was black and white..I LOVED IT..kepp up the good work!

Imagery, gorgeous. So vivd and enchanting. The word choice seemed so simple yet so effective. Again hooked onto this piece. Quite interesting like you are telling a story. Again a 5/5 from me. ~Mel

This is an amazing poem, very dark and not in the least cliche. It also has a great flow and great rhyme. I really liked the ending, too. 5/5

jess ~

Wow this poem really gives me goosebumps. It's really creepy lol. The imagery is so good that you can picture everything so clearly and it kinda creeps the reader out [at least it did for me.] hehe. But woow, amazing write. With fabulous imagery! The flow was amazing as well as the great word choice - very descriptive. :] Great work 5/5.