I really like this one...
I love the repetition, I think it helped get the point across very well.
The flow was good throughout and the ending was perfect.

Another very well written poem. I liked the repetition through out. Great work, keep it up.

Peace, Joe

I agree with the other two I really liked this. I liked how you can take a line repeate it a thousand times and it never gets old, it feels natural. The only thing I didnt like to much was the last stanza it didnt really make much sence and I didnt feel the same passion that I felt in the beginning. Nice work though.

I likee it,
its nice :) i like how you wrote it to.
xx.