Hey that is such a good poem!
it really got to me! wooow!
hope ur ok! if you ever wanna talk to someone...

..::steph::..

Hey that is such a good poem!
it really got to me! wooow!
hope ur ok! if you ever wanna talk to someone...

..::steph::..

Wonderful... absolutely wonderful...

Oo kewls..i think it needs more detials or somethin needs to be added to b more drawn in but hey thts just me..good job =)

I love this...the ending was perfect, you have a way with ending your work, you know how to hit the reader's nerve.
The flow was flawless, the imagery created vivid pictures and I think this was beautifullu written.

Wow very nicely pened, however I would say break it up a bit perhaps into stanzas. Other than that great write.

Peace, Joe

Nice poem. It’s overall strong and I like the fact that it’s slightly abstract.
Though I think it would even read better in stanzas of four lines.