Testing to see if i can comment myself.

Hmm, I didn't like the way you wrote 'Man's' river. It sounded really suggestive. I think you should have written this as a Haiku, but it wasn't short. Not quite complete, but you did add good description.

I think you could've made it a little longer, but I think it sounds fairly complete. Nice topic.

Its ok

just needs a few more stanza's added to it