I like this poem. i've been in situations like this before..

and thanks for your comment.
it means a lot to me.
=]

-parker

Aww this poem was really sweet! an interesting write and a good flow!
keep it up!
thanx for da comment =]
nuff luv x

Good poem, written very nicely... keep it up you are talented

This poem needs alot of revising the grammar is off in alot of section which makes the whole poem not flow with your idea. So the message is hard to swallow. Agin its good but you have to really see through the mistakes to appreate the talent Plot121

This is so sweet and of course kind of sad. I agree with ^^^. Just the grammer mistakes.

look at the difference between her and me
we could last and together we'd be

My fave lines ^^^

I love this poem, it was great, the flow was great the structure was perfect, and i couldn't find nething wrong with it, 5/5

I look at you so happy with her
my eyes fill with tears and its all just a blur
that day i when home and cried
the pain i have hurt so much i almost died

my fave lines^^

A good poem, with good flow and rhyme. very sweet imagery. A very sweet poem.
well done
love Tara-Kay
x

WOW, im not a fan of rhyming poems but this one is just perfect. i love it, i love it lol i love it. i was in this situation before and its just sad feeling like that, damn 5/5 girl

Wow it seems as though you are describing my situation and my life at the present moment. Love hurts when it cuts deeply; however, those brief moments of happiness keeps us coming back for more.

--Sher