So good.
I loved it.
5/5
Keep up the good work!

This is by far the best poem i've read on death.....

Beautiful write though it is very sad and I'm sorry for your friends loss. This poem I think is one of your best. Another 5/5

Beautiful...very nice wrk...sad though yet u've made it so filled wth emetions...Good job on this 1!
xxPoojaxx

Very very good job so very sad but enlightening as well keep it up

much love
laura

Very good poem.I could picture somebody suffering a lost and trying to stay strong but falling apart all at the same time.Again, I think you should save explaining the poem or whatever until the end.I don't really get the spaces between the lines but it was a good poem.5/5 again.^-^

<3Amber

I can completly relate i love this poem! its was beautifully! done so sad! 5/5

The last lines were beautiful. This one is a five too. Very good poem and it's so true.

Your poems all have such good rhymes! and flows. especially this one the flow was great!

This is an excellent poem...very well written. the flow was perfect and also the rhyming..

and i really like how you spaced in between each line...nice job. 5/5 from me.

I thought this was well written, it flowed well and the layout was different but simple. You really have a teltn here.
Tara-Kay

^ a talent (sorry)

Sad but thats the very beauty and power of it. you rally outdid yourslef on this one. amazing job. 5/5 keep it up. ~KM~

Very sad indeed. I think you could make it more short and more meaningful, instead of saying when you loose someone....
You could say loosing someone ....
Still it was overall touching, kel.

1st stanza - Ahh, I didnt like how completely was used in the 3rd and 4th lines right next to eachother.. but it didnt really effect the poem to mess it up so yeah it was alright.. but still it was like.. I wanted to read a different word, instead of the same one twice you know?

Woow, this is a goosebump poem. This really gave me goosebumps.. Such a true write.. and it almost makes me cry because it makes me think of those I've lost, and how I've always felt like a part of my heart was missing with them gone.

Wow. This was amazingly done.
5/5.

This was a very sweet poem to write for your friend I am sure it means alot to him and has helped him through this difficult time.
When you lose someone you love,

You lose a piece of your heart,

You're completely overwhelmed,

Completely torn apart

(These words really describe what it feels like right after you lose someone so close to you. The confusion and emptiness leaves you completely torn)

You look upon the grave,

Where an angel now lays.

You feel an ache in your soul,

Where that angel now stays.

(Here you really touch the readers with your words and leave them feeling as empty and sad as if it has happened to them. You are definately a talented writer) 5/5

Its a powerful poem it says so much you are so great at this keep it up girl

Emotional and heart touching...great work!

You are really an amazing writer. i home schooled myself, any tips on how i could get better?