Just to clairify the meaning of this poem: my best friend and i were really really close and he ended up kissing another girl, and it broke my heart. 6 days after we started going out. Its been nine months. YAY!

The first stanza is great but after the second stanza the flow was lost. I agree with Tasteless about using more powerful words. Also, maybe if you started each stanza with it's own 'sentence' instead of taking one stanzza into another.. I give it a 4.
Tyanna

Mm...i like his 1...neat n nice work..but i do think the flow was a tad off in the middle...i liked the poem as a whole..it did have it's own beauty though..but maybe u could use powerful words though to just give the poem better effect(lol..just a thought)...Good wrk btw!
xxPoojaxx

The fool lol, your so attractive your have every boy for miles wanting to go out with you. So move on and I predict in five years you wont even remember the guy. Nice poem, its always best to write from your own emotions, 5/5

Hey,
I think your friend isn't worth you, even if he didn't knew he couldn't kiss some else, he should not have done that! you're not to blame, remember there are plenty fish in the sea (well thats what my mom always tells me) now back to the poem,
you began so good till the fifth stanza there the flow changes, I dont know what happened but I dont really like it, the beginning though was great, but dont worry you deserve a 5/5 from me,
take care,
stephanie

This poem is really cute, but girl your fifteen do you know how much time you have to find a really good guy? Anyways this poem has really good flow and i like the way you rhyme....keep it up good pen..5/5

The content of this poem discribes an implied commitment that I am very familar with. To love someone in your mind heart and, soul can be more binding than a physical attraction This poem expresses a pain most have felt or will feel

Wow. i loved it i gave you a 5/5 the flow was great, the wording was perfect. my fave stanza was this one=
3 Seconds to say I love you,
3 hours to explain.
Even though I can not help it,
I find myself to blame.

it was great but it does only take 3 seconds to say it and less time than that to have your heart broken. over all it was great

It was so true and the flow keeps you going..and I want to give an opinion if you appreciate

3 Seconds to say I love you,=Three seconds to say...
3 hours to explain.=Three hours to explain

It would look better as an idea

Other than that beatifully penned,
Take care
Laura

Aww honey, im sorry, that must have been really painful. the emotion in this poem is fantastic. like really fantastic. well done. its flow was brilliant and the rhyming that you used sometimes was flawless.
well done
my only criticism is "babe" i just dont like using slang like that in poetry, but having said that it kind of fits well to ur poem..anyway well done
Geo

Wow. i love this poem...im sooo sorry for what happened. it must still hurt you to this day. again im sorry. i can kinda relate but he did more than just kiss the girl. but yeah this poem was well writtin. it had good rythem and i good flow. keep it up. and thanx for commenting my poem.

***ayshley***

Wow. i love this poem...im sooo sorry for what happened. it must still hurt you to this day. again im sorry. i can kinda relate but he did more than just kiss the girl. but yeah this poem was well writtin. it had good rythem and i good flow. keep it up. and thanx for commenting my poem.

***ayshley***

AWWW!That was so sad.I'm sorry for what happened.This poem was so full of heartfelt emotion.The flow was pretty good and over all I just give it a 5/5.But telling what the poems about at the beginning kinda takes away from the poem itself if you know what I mean.But anyways, good job.^-^

<3Amber

I usually hate love poems but you pulled it off. I'm not sure if it's a five but I'm not sure if it's a four either so I'll do you a favor and give it a five.

Wow that was a beautiful write so emotional! i loved it.
I told you that I loved you,
I gave you my whole heart.
But before I seen it coming,
You tore my world apart.
i am speechles!!!!

This situation definately hurts and I've been there myself a few times, it never gets any easier when it happens over time you just learn how to handle it better. Excellent job with your emotions once again, you don't seem to hold anything back when you write and you shouldn't :) Great job 5/5 GG23

"3 Seconds to say I love you,
3 hours to explain.
Even though I can not help it,
I find myself to blame."

-- "Cannot" is one word.

"I told you that I loved you,
I gave you my whole heart.
But before I seen it coming,
You tore my world apart."

-- In the third line, "saw" would be the correct word in this line. Not "seen".

"Now I find myself,
On the ground,
With a shattered heart,
As the tears roll down;"

-- Hm. Honestly, I'm not a huge fan of this stanza. Especially the second line. I just.. don't like it. I think you should make it longer. It'd be easier to read, and it would flow better. Oh, and you should use a period on the end of the second line, too, since you do it throughout the rest of the piece.

"From my cheeks,
Onto these pages.
What just happened,
I can not change it."

-- Again, "cannot" is one word. And "pages" and "it" don't rhyme. You should make those lines rhyme since the rest of the poem does.

"What's done is done,
But it can't be true.
You couldn't have,
I'm in love with you."

-- Um.. "You couldn't have I'm in love with you"? That makes no sense.

"She was just some girl,
A simple dare.
But I love you babe,
And you know I care."

-- I liked this stanza. I don't see "care" rhymed with "dare" very often, so it's nice & unique.

"Why am I so hurt?
You were never mine.
But even still,
I can't help but cry."

-- I liked this, too. Good ending. Lots of emotion. Good job.

Four out of five. [4/5]

``Briana

Really nice and emotional, I really liked the last stanza,it was the best part of the poem and what caught my eye

Everyone can relate to this poem.
it is so full of feeling and i enjoyed it very much.

keep writing, you're very talented.

This is a really good poem, and it expressed the feeling right. The stanza I really liked was the first one and the second one. But, after that, the flow left the poem. It was good though. Good job.

.:CiiNDY:.