Oh no. I can only imagine what this could have been line.. I bet it really tore your heart to shreads.. Very sad write.. and this does happen sometimes.. and it shouldn't.. but I guess you just have to express those feelings more cleary to that person so that they know that you love them. Getting close to someone and basically falling for them and then having your heart broken is completely heartwrenching... I can only imagine the pain you went through knowing he kissed another girl. But, hey.. Life goes on! :]

5/5

I agree with everyone elese...it was just great. Very emotinal I liked the last two stanza 's

I thought that overall the poem was really good and it was your own life experience and i love that you could share it with us in such a poetic way. The rhyming was good throughout the entire peice, and the flow was spot on in most of it.

"Now I find myself,
On the ground,
With a shattered heart,
As the tears roll down;"

^^ i do not feel that this flows very well,
you could probably place your commas in different places so it will flow bettre.

Overall a good read and a well deserved 5/5