Ok, I liked the meaning of this poem i thought maybe you could of added some more to this to make it longer. The ryhme scheme seemed ok but at the started you had the abab ryhme then it was aabb and it kept changing throughout the poem. I think if you changed this and made it at one ryhme scheme then it would flow much better and make the poem great. a good effort though well done ~mel

This is a short, but interesting story. If it's anything like this, your novel will probably be fabulous. ;) great job.

This was a nicely written narrative. It had a nice flow, but felt like you could've done more.

5/5. it was great overall.

I love this poem its so sad 5/5 keep it up