12:59

by The Queen of Spades   Apr 2, 2007


12:59
And I just can't sleep
Genetic insomnia
Runs much too deep

Or maybe I can't bear
How this night began
Your cruel words
And even crueler hand

With a simple wave
You pushed me away
Convinced me hope
Was for another day

So I struggle to find
This glorious hour
Only to realize it is lost
Within your power

As the minutes tick by
I lay in my bed, eyes bright
Unable to turn away
From the alluring light

12:59
I down too much vicodin
It cures my insomnia
The deepest sleep kicks in

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  • 17 years ago

    by Melpomene

    I liked this idea of this is was quite unique and interesting i do think you could of went into more details what you were feeling and what not. and i think you repeated some words to many times. I liked the length of the lines it didnt make me bored kept me interested throughout it. a good piece of work here with a few changes it would definitly be perfect. Well done ~mel

  • 17 years ago

    by AllHailTheHeartbreaker

    Another excellent piece. The flow and rhythm is wonderful. Also a good use of imagery.
    5/5

    [tragic]

  • 17 years ago

    by Romancing the Darker Side

    Excellent vocabulary and wroding. I love it!

  • 17 years ago

    by Kaila

    Oh wow good poem I liked the beggining and end stanzas the 12:49 thing was really good nice job

  • 17 years ago

    by LockedInEternity

    5/5....i liked the new idea...very original and no cliche rhyming..
    i liked the repetition of 12:59 and i liked the words you used to express urself...i also thought it was uite different which is good:) had been any shorter it would have lacked detail..and any longer, it would have lost my attention..so perfect lenght...awesome job:)
    it was just the right lenght too, if it

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