I love the poem you keep getting better an better

Wow, pretty good, flowed nicely..and.. all that jazz.

It doesn't seem to flow that well. I guess it's just how the endrhymes are. Like the idea but something about the words nearly defeat it to me. In these lines:

"They try to go on with plans they own
but they are blown"

there's something about it either a missing word which messes up the flow or a word added that also does the same. Otherwise ignoring the flow I find it interesting.
~Faith-less

Great poem i love the flow and i like the plot of it :D:D great poem and thanks again lol for the comment:D:D good poem

keenan

It was a okay poem. I like the rhyming in it :D flow was smooth good job.