That's a really strong poem.....really good but strong, im with ya though.
5.5 keep it up

I am a person who is aginst wars completley. So i agree with most of the arguements you haveused throughout this poem, all are good and valid points.
About the poem itself, i thought the structure was wonderful, and your rhyming was verry nice and origional!
5/5 from me
Steph.

I adore this poem...
The first stanza is such a great opener and each is better than the last.
I thought the flow was flawless throughout, the imagery used created vivid pictures, and the wording was beautiful.
I loved the ending, it has so much impact, and hit me hard.
You really did a great job with this.

Many things wrong, what use is "say"
[[Erm...maybe I don't understand that or didn't read it correctly, but that just doesn't make sense to me...]]

Wow. I LOVE the fourth stanza. Definately the best of the entire poem. Very strong.

Nevertheless, Those only emotions before
[[Those isn't capatalized.]]

We're shoot them again if they try another strike
[[We are shooting ...
We will shoot...
Erm. Yeah.]]

So I lift my cup and drink my bloodthirsty fill
To death, to mankind (to how long they may last)
To war, to peace (though only one voice fulfilled)
to those who live scarred and disabled from the past
[[Defintaely not your best rhyming skills in lines 1 and 3 ....
But, I love this stanza...Just..that damn rhyme...eh.]]

-To I who sit around every night and day
With not enough virtues to mend what we pay
[[Love this stanza, again, but the first line is awkward ...
Maybe: To whom I sit with/around...]]

Anyways.
Enough of the critic.

I loved it. Aside from grammatical errors or random flow problems, it is really strong and truthful. And that's what we need in the world.
It's not your best, I'll be honest, but because it has so much to say in such a small story and because it's just so...I don't know how to explain it [I just know I really love it] I'm giving it no less than a five.

Great job, as always, Dear.

xTheEcstasyOfSuicidex

I just want to say wow. thats all it takes to describe it. you had your heart set on what you wrote about and i agree with the opinion the war sucks, wholeheartedly. nice work. please return the favor.

You wanted an honest comment. Here you go. I'm not sugar-coating.

"Another thought, another dried out piece"

^This rhyme seems very, very forced. What does it even mean?

"Money like waters, pouring away"

^Make water singular for better flow. Try another word for pouring, maybe cascading or something like that. It seems awkward.

"Many things wrong, what use is "say""

^Either say "many wrong things" or "many things are wrong." And I have no idea what you were trying to say in the second half.

"Millions and millions as Guiness Knows"

^What?

"For six years it raged, unheard, unheard"

^What's the point of repeating unheard?

"Nay some say, one million people ain't enough"

^You went into totally different ways of the english language. From Old English to slang. Really throws me off. One or the other.

-I love your message. I really do. Just try to explain things more. The above things were nitpicky. Don't think I was trying to be mean, because I wasn't. Have a nice night.

Wow, this was so compacted full of anger and emotion, the flow was pretty good, some things didn't fit as good with the rhythm of the poem, but it was very good, and an amazing poem to read. 5/5
gabriella

I can tell you feel strongly about the subject. there were several spots that were like speed bumps, you had to stop, slow down and try to figure out the meaning. yes, sometimes less is more. but some things need explaining. i understand the desire to say profound things with few words. and this is all just my opinion. there is a lot of passion behind it. it really feels like you put your heart into this write.

First of all, I have to comment on the title. It seems to be vague enough to have the reader completely surprised by the actual topic of the poem. I, personally, love the title.

The only thing that you could possibly improve on in this poem is the word choice. The words are fairly basic, and there isn't a lot of variety.

The imagery and rhythm is great, though. It was a really interesting read, I haven't read anything quite like this before. You've definitely stated your point well. Nice work!

I loved it , i agree with all the points made in this.

keep up the good work.

Good job

Very good poem, I really enjoyed it, Great work, 5/5.

Wow, this is so amazing