Omg that wuz so amzing i could sort of see it when i read it great job 6/5:P great job.. any ways i really liek feel free to comment oon any of mine im getting better anyways yehh great poem

Absolutely wonderful...
though the title of the poem could give me a clue, i wasn't able to get what would happen, 'till the end...
the way you've written it was great, i could almost see it...
5/5
keep going
*isabel*

This is really cute.. i loved it. keep writing.

Manda

Wow that was amazing. Your title was perfect, and every line drew the reader in. Your message was clear and the emotion was so powerful. Imagery was brilliant I could picture every stanza including the end happening! Amazing job!

Ohh.. sad! But this was beautifully written. i have thing that could be fixed to make it better.. *i didn't think that this poem COULD get much better!*

You slide it on my finger
It fits me perfectly
No words are said
We're kissing gently

I hear a loud buzz
Slowly open my eyes
It was just a dream
I begin to realize

these two stanaza's didn't really go with your "rhyming" scheme.. but it didn't really matter as much as some other poems that sway away from their rhyming scheme.. i dont know why, lol, but i think that the other stanzas were so amazing, that they made up for it. I had to read through this 2 times to see if there was anything that could be fixed to make it better! you did a really great job! keep it up! :]

Aww no! This is so cute but then so disappointing at the end! Not in the way that it is written, but in the way that the story goes. Of course the title hints at the outcome, but the first part of the poem kind of makes you forget it because it's so positive. Another very clever write! xXx

Great poem I could picture it all as your words told it

Awe.. tht is very good poem.. its cute.. yet so sad cuz its only a dream.. I could imagine every thing as I read each line.. amzaing!!.. GReat work!!..^-^

Wow, that was beutifulllll... although i read the title before i started reading the poem, i got so deep into it i forgot its just a dream and so the last stanza bought me back to earth lol such a beautiful moment displayed so beautifully..ahhh. i think the flows perfect, i see no gliches personally.. and its great how though the title gives it away you manage to get the reader away from the title straight from the fist stanza! =]
take care, and keep it up!
x

Beautiful poem i loved reading it, it brough back sum wonderful memories for me. thanks

Aawwww.......thats a strong and Very sweet poem and written excellently i realy love ir , so cute and full of true deep feelings and emotions and the words were so sweet =] great poem !! keep up the good work =] 5/5

Hehe sweet and well written, such a great poem i love it : )